King Vogner rules the prosperous kingdom of Sette Diavoli. His people very well like him because of his kind nature. The kingdom under his reign has been flourishing with crops and housing for all the people residing. His reign started when a wrathful god named Peshmerga terrorized the kingdom. Peshmerga attempted to destroy the kingdom because the people refused to worship him. The Black Knight, Mazus, defeated Peshmerga. Ever since then, King Vogner, his wife Windy, and their son Argus have ruled over the kingdom to protect the people.
My Vision of King Vogner
Source: Wikia
Over the years the king has started to strike alliances with other kingdoms to form a connection between them. The king’s advisors and Argus was against this idea because they were already the most powerful kingdom in the country. They could dominate the whole land with little resistance. The king disliked the idea of one powerful kingdom and believed that the whole country needed to be strong to be able to fend off intruders.
The blindness of his father made the Argus angry. He believed that the king should be ruthless to intimidate potential enemies. Argus started to resent his father and he always thought his father was a weak king, despite being beloved by the people. Over time it started to cause him to think that he could rule better than his father. Argus persuaded his father’s advisors that his idea of ruling was better. He met with some of the advisors in secret to discuss the plans to get what they all want.
On the third year anniversary of the defeat of Peshmerga, the kingdom held a celebration feast in the palace. At this time, Argus planned to poison his father to assume the throne and to wage war against the other kingdoms to conquer the land. So before the king went to bed, Argus proposed one last toast and with that gave the king laced wine that wouldn’t hold affect until the king went to sleep.
The next morning the shrill cry of the queen woke the whole castle. Everybody in the kingdom discovered that the king is dead. Faking his sadness, Argus assumed the throne and ruled with an iron fist. He immediately declared war against the other kingdoms to dominate the land. The kingdom started to become disordered and there was chaos everywhere. All the people were afraid to do anything about the sudden change of life style. People were dying and there was nothing they could do about it.
The queen started to suspect what has been going on. She started questioning the advisors that had quickly started accepting Argus’ transition. She learned that the king had been poisoned but didn’t know who poisoned him. The queen gathered that Argus has assassinated the king in order to become king. She gathered her belongings in the dead of night and set off on a journey to find someone to help her take her son down and reestablish what her husband did. She went off to find the one that defeated Peshmerga those many years ago.
AUTHOR’S NOTE:
This story is from the Ancient Egypt unit, specifically the Death of Osiris story. In the original story, Oriris was a beloved ruler with the people. Set, Oriris’ brother, wanted to rule instead of Osiris, so he made a chest to lock Osiris in to kill him during a feast. The queen, Isis, went out to look for her husband’s body. Set ruled with an iron fist and caused disorder. The story goes on with Isis’ journey to find Oriris’ body. The story ends with Isis being sheltered in a poor woman’s house. The woman’s child died by a scorpion sting and Isis raised the child from the dead.
I changed the setting and characters to the ones in my previous stories but this one has a more independent nature so it would be easy to follow without the knowledge of my other stories. I wanted to flow all my weekly stories together with the same characters, settings, and artifacts but keeping them independent enough for readers who didn’t read the previous ones to follow without getting confused, but if you had read my other stories, you can see how they all tie together and hopefully by the end I can have one large story.
I also changed the purpose of the queen’s journey. I made it to where the queen searches for Mazus. I also made this story with a slight cliffhanger because this story had one without resolving the fate of Set and if Isis found what she was looking for.
Story Source: Egyptian Myth and Legend
Author: Donald Mackenzie
Year: 1907
Hi again! Another great story. I read the Ancient Egypt unit as well and loved it! I think that you did an amazing job rewriting this story! I wasn't really sure how to go about rewriting the stories in the first half of the unit since they were so abstract, but you definitely did a great job! I like how this one is a little more independent from the other stories, but that you are still linking all your stories together. I'd like to read the entire thing at the end of the class. I think it will be so interesting as one long story!
ReplyDeleteThis was definitely an interesting story. The dynamic of the son overthrowing the king was unique because I feel in most stories like this an advisor is the one to do that. There were many points when it wasn’t a very smooth flowing story. I read another one of stories in a previous week and I know I made the same comment. It doesn’t seem like you do much revision and that inhibits the story from being as good as it could be.
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ReplyDeleteI think it's a really cool idea to link all of your stories together like you are doing. That definitely takes a lot of thinking and creativity. This story follows along the lines of many fairy tales stories where the king is trying to get overthrown by another person but that is a great story to follow. You diction and word choice is very mature and it sounded like a professionally written story. Great job!